The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England
between 1985 and 2000.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting
the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Report1

The table indicates the number of miles by the average English person in 1985 and 2000, using various means of transport.

The number of miles walked, cycled and travelled by local bus all decreased. Of these, the number of miles travelled by local bus decreased the most, from 429 miles in 1985 to 274 miles in 2000.

The number of miles travelled by car, long distance bus, train and taxi all increased.
The number of miles driven by car was 3,199 in 1985 and rose by 50% to 4,806 in 2000. The number of miles travelled by long distance bus more than doubled from 54 miles
(1985)to 124 miles (2000). The number of miles driven by taxi trebled from 13 miles
(1985) to 42 miles (2000). The use of other, unspecified, forms of transport also
increased.

Overall, the number of miles travelled by the average English person rose from 4,740
miles in 1985 to 6,475 miles in 2000, with the increase of cars accounting for almost
all of that increase. (173 words)


Report2

The table demonstrates how different modes of travel changed in England in 15 years spanning from 1985 to 2000. In general, the modes are classified into two kinds in terms of average miles travelled per person per year: one enjoyed rising popularity while the other decreasing.

The travel modes which gained popularity in the period included cars, long distance buses, trains, taxis and others. Cars remained top among the modes in the 15 years, with its average miles increasing considerably from 3,199 in 1985 to 4,806 in 2000. Long distance buses and taxis seemed to be warmly welcomed by travelers, so average miles travelled in the two modes almost tripled.

Travels by walking, bicycles and local buses lost travelers’ favor in the one and a half decade. Average travelling distance by local buses suffered the biggest decrease, dropping
from 429 to 274, whilst the number of miles by walking and bikes fell mildly from 255 to 237 and from 51 to 41 respectively. Despite the decreases, however, the total miles travelled
grew from 4,740 to 6,475.

In brief, the total travelling distance in the country grew in 15 years when cars, long distance buses, trains, taxis and other modes of travel were more popular and walking, bicycling and local transportation less popular. (212 words)


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